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himitsu_no_koto, February 25th, 2011, 10:47 am ( Reply )

- Heh OTL Done with my 5-page update. ;A; I'll be gone for a few days so I tried drawing as many pages as I can today :3 Thank you for reading, +rate and comments!! ;A;
If you're wondering about the connection between his glasses and his "lover" it's about what he mentioned previously about him losing a lot that day. He lost his eyeglasses + lover XD

Ichi... he came up with another of his ideas, yet again.
Haha I suddenly felt bad for Sensei =.=; He spent his last 1.5 hours in a bar drinking---lol now look at you sensei: wasted XD

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himitsu_no_koto, February 26th, 2011, 4:05 am ( Reply )

- Hellooo ;A; I just got home from watching a Speech Contest, I was there because I wanted to support a close friend of mine (the same person who passed the N1 JLPT) and guess what!! XD She won first prize!! ;A; Hahaha Although I'm a bit sick today (runny nose =.= and mild headache) it was worth going out to see/hear her participate XD I logged in for a while to check my email so I thought I'd check Smackjeeves too. By the way I passed the Language exam thing I was talking about last time ;A; Wee! Thanks for wishing me goodluck! Hehe~ Anyway I might as well write my replies, thanks for taking time to comment!! :3

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Hiroshii, NaturallyOblivious, Rika-pjong: Thank you very much... I appreciate your comments and I'm glad you're liking it so far... ;A;

The angel Ruler: Heh I might not be updating that much these coming days, I thought I'd draw while I have time.

Feathers & Hyli_Tuben_Mechanic: Don't worry he didn't spend the whole 1.5 hours drinking XD

Miyuxkanata & orangerose: Ichi's the one who doesn't make sense. LOL He just knows his surface because he doesn't wanna learn more about the iiner part of himself.

Lulu: Hello. :D Thanks for the comment. I'll try to address everything you've mentioned and take this as an opportunity to admit my mistakes/shotcomings as well, first I also think that my story is not really original; but I swear I did not purposedly based if off any manga/story I've read before. Maybe the plot got influenced in one way or another. Heh but I am trying to come up with different scenarios---to give this story some stuff that aren't very much cliched (for me). I am not really sure as to what's cliche for other people since we read different stories. And I am also not sure if what I'll be putting at the latter part will interest people. Next, I am not really good with English--really. I don't use it in conversations, save for online ones or when it is really needed (in papers for school). I am not really good with grammar, but I am trying to learn, it's embarrassing to admit this for my age though. Haha I was never confident of my English.

Proportions/ perspectives/ angles are challenges for me. One of the many reasons why I don't draw these is that, I don't really know how to. I am still practicing though--but I opt not to put them here until the time that I am confident enough to draw them. My characters' have the same facial features, yes I admit, and I think so too. However I try to make certain
differences among them-but I guess it didn't work though ;A; I am still lost and trying to find what style really suits me---it's frustrating for me actually since I've been drawing for so long yet I haven't really developed that much. As for the sketchiness of the comic, recently I've been drawing in a fast pace. (drawing this comic has become a breather for me since I'm a bit stressed with school-related stuff) I DO APOLOGIZE FOR THE QUALITY OF MY PAGES... :(

Yes, it is my first comic,I had a lot of anxieties while working on this one. I didn't really know how to start, or even how normal people would converse in English. Even for me, my dialogues don't sound so natural. In fact... I had an idea of redoing everything from the start, but I don't have much free time and I know that it will be impossible to do so with my current schedule.
I appreciate your criticisms very much, although honestly, I'm a bit offended/depressed at the same time. Hehe to know that your comic is boring and cliched---I don't even know what to say. And also because I thought I was doing good enough for people to somehow enjoy the comic, maybe I am slacking too much, but your comment somehow woke me up. Right now, I just don't know how to start again. Haha but I don't take your words as anything like an insult. Thanks for pointing out my mistakes/shortcomings from a reader's point of view. I'll try to work them out, somehow. Thank you for reading my comic despite its countless flaws...

Shiako: Heh thank you so much!! But I don't think it's even worth buying. OTL ;A; I really hate the first 2 chapters. They look ugly :(

AmoriiBlossom: They're the "Jumping to conclusions-kind-of-people" XD

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:) As always, thank you!

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I love your story so far. Just started reading ti today :D Your art is so beautiful and so are your characters.

posted by NaturallyOblivious on February 25th, 2011, 11:33 am





 
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The plot is really good and I like your drawing style ... so keep up the good work!!!! ^O^

posted by Rika-pjong on February 25th, 2011, 11:45 am





 
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Mega update o-O
I feel sorry for sensei...sorta. XP

posted by The angel Ruler on February 25th, 2011, 12:24 pm



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omg.. soo happy^^
I want to see more of this:)

posted by Hiroshii on February 25th, 2011, 2:30 pm





 
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d'aw
poor Sensei.
But dear lord, an hour and a half??

posted by Hyli_Tuben_Mechanic on February 25th, 2011, 5:39 pm





 
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Tell him sensi how this brat used you and now is acusing you of the same thing

posted by renchikolul on February 25th, 2011, 5:51 pm





 
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*puts all replies on one comment*
Page 145: はい、一くん、泣きないです。XD あ、私の日本語がへたですが、私の授業の日本語がとてもへたです。XD 私たちは漢字を学びのが始めます。お!今日は二動詞の文章を学びます!:D

Page 146: OMG the store is full of BL magazines! D8 XDDD

Page 148: 笑を絵!Also, sensei acts like me without my contacts/glasses. XD

Page 149: 一のチビが大好きです!

Edit: Sensei is going to have the biggest hangover ever. O^O

posted by Devil_Feathers on February 25th, 2011, 6:53 pm





 
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WHAT IS THIS. DRINKING WEEK ? @ . @ /is a person that makes no sense

Pfft. Yes. A "close friend" who knows yourself very well. 8D;;

posted by Miyuxkanata on February 25th, 2011, 6:54 pm





 
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Oh poor sensei... I didn't really peg him as a drinking kinda guy though. o_o I guess he has had a hard day. :C

Don't lie Ichi! You don't know yourself very well at all! If you did, you wouldn't be in the situation in the first place. -n-

posted by orangerose on February 25th, 2011, 9:05 pm



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Lol, this manga is kinda, really... Stereotypical, I've read countless manga yaoi/shounen-ai and shoujo/shoujo-ai with nearly the same exact storyline.

Heh sorry, anyway! I was wondering if English was a second language for you? Your grammar is really weird/off.
Criticism wise, the lighter/smaller font is kinda hard to read, I have to get really close to read the panels with such font at times. If you have too much font for the space, maybe you should consider shortening less dialogue, or spacing the amount out more throughout the pages (Making the comic longer.). How you draw is okay, but half the time the proportions are wonky, and you don't seem to draw much of anything larger than a waist view.
Try using photos of real people as reference when you draw, or just flat out draw realism for practice, it helps immensely with correcting anatomical mistakes since manga/animé characters are based directly off real people. Your characters have the same face/eye types, and sometimes very similar hair, I've actually gotten confused at times who is who. Look up, and try out different face/eye types, people in real life look different from one another (Even Japanese people.).
The pages themselves are very bland, lots of white and some sketchy line work, blank spaces with just text or faces/waist shots/chibis of characters. I can see where you're trying to get at with "feeling" and what-not, but background and setting is actually very important for any kind of comic, and can actually better translate the mood when done correctly (Put more depth and contrast into the pages, they're so lifeless.). It can be very difficult and time consuming to do, but hardly ever drawing them, if at all is honestly kinda lazy and seems like you're just avoiding them rather than trying to learn.

Even if you suck at first, if you keep practising, and have the mind-set to get better, eventually you will. I will be honest that the manga is really boring, cliché, and I feel so little of a connection to the characters that I don't remember their names half the time. But since this is (I'm assuming.) your first serious project, of course it's gonna suck a little, we all start somewhere. Also please don't think this is an insult, it really isn't, I'm just trying to point out what to work on so your future manga/projects will be even better (Meaning I'm taking your seriously as an artist.).

Good luck with your manga, and good luck with whatever you're doing for the next few days. <3

posted by Lulu (Guest) on February 25th, 2011, 9:09 pm





 
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WAAHH *jumps like crazy yelling everywhere*

Your comic is so epic. Print it someday soon so I can buy it <333

posted by Shiako on February 25th, 2011, 10:32 pm





 
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so he thought ichi was dating his brother... aw, both of you guys Dx

posted by AmoriiBlossom on February 26th, 2011, 12:51 am





 
Feathers @ Lulu/Himitsu-chan ( Reply )

There are some things I agree with you on, actually. But I don't want Himi-chan to end up how I did on fanfiction.net(scared to write/draw anything for fear of people not liking it). So I'll say this. Yes, this comic does need some work, but honestly it's a whole lot better than a lot of "first comic" comics.

Himitsu-chan, I do like this comic and my little heart jumps happily when I see an update. But Lulu is correct on a lot of things(one being the character designs and who is who), I won't deny that. However, I am a friend who doesn't want to see you suffer. I do know what it's like to have so many people tell you that you're the best, but then someone comes along and points out all your flaws. It's crushing...well at least that's how it was for me.

Anyway, I feel super terrible for not being the one to tell you your flaws first, but that's a lesson learned. But the point I'm trying to make is to not give up and think you're terrible because you're not. I'd hate to see someone with so much potential and passion just slip away like this.

*hugs* So just take what Lulu said, and keep your head high. Think about it this way, she thinks you're good enough to recieve this critique. Most people will not give advice because they feel that the author is just "too far gone" or they're just all over the place and can't do anything right.

We all gotta start somewhere, even me, which I am deciding if I should just dive into this comic I want to make or wait. Not too sure yet. XD

And I can give you English lessons if you want. I have an MSN if you do. :3

posted by Devil_Feathers on February 26th, 2011, 12:01 pm





 
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*gasp* I wonder what Ichi is going to do! ;A;
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*see's people giving critics so she feels like she wants to say some too*
The only problems I see with this comic is the paneling 8D;;
I don't know sometimes I get confused on to read which panel first ._.
and at the start of the comic I kind of get confused on whats going on :O
But honestly, this is seriously the best comic I have read so far on SJ TuT
The characters are AWESOME and the story is awesome too ;u; I didn't think it was cliche, most of the time I didn't know what was going to happen next :O Like now XD
I don't really agree with Lulu o_o
Some people see things differently, like how I can actually recognize who is who and how she can't really do that TuT
B-But don't worry! You'll improve! We all have to go through stuff like this TuT /like me

posted by AikiiYukii on February 27th, 2011, 7:10 am



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