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himitsu_no_koto, February 26th, 2011, 10:52 am ( Reply )

O_O - Okay, I lied. Here's the next page. I hope it's okay that my pages are like this for the meantime. It's not that I feel lazy to update, I just felt like I want my pages to be like this and I'm somehow busy with school. Yet I couldn't resist drawing a page OTL haha... Despite the quality of this page, it actually took me almost an hour to finish drawing... and another 30 minutes typing the dialogue. I think I better write them down first---doing it spontaneously is eating a lot of time.

From now on, if ever you'll notice grammatical errors, it would be really helpful if you could point them out to me. :) Not only that I will learn from those mistakes but for others to better understand my English/dialogues as well. Anyway, I apologize for the changes in my drawing style. ;A;
Until now I still feel lost.
I replied to the comments in the previous page by the way :)
Thanks and goodnight.
PS: [edit]
I'll find a way to draw another page tomorrow if anyone would like that...

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Waahh This made my heart hurt

posted by Maky9 on February 26th, 2011, 11:27 am





 
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awwwww ;-;
i can't wait to read what happens next ;/w/;

posted by marufan on February 26th, 2011, 11:52 am





 
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Why are drunk scenes always the best?

posted by The angel Ruler on February 26th, 2011, 12:05 pm



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Oh don't worry about the change in style, this page is beautiful. <3 I actually really like this.

posted by SavvyChan on February 26th, 2011, 1:34 pm





 
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Aww the notes~ x3 I love the notes. They're just so sweet. >w<

We be close to make-up(out) time, yes? (ouo)b I can't wait. 8D
But! Don't stress out trying to get another page done. :( We won't hate you if you don't post a page ASAP.

posted by orangerose on February 26th, 2011, 1:58 pm





 
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I'm supposed to like English and be good at it ( spelling, grammar, and punctuation ), but . . . I swear, I fail so much on tests. "orz But er-- I'll point some out if I see any. ; A ; But it feels . . . awkward if I do . . . like it makes me feel superior in English when I'm not. And if I do correct a sentence structure, it seems opinionated. Or it is opinionated. /sobs

I realized while reading this page, I have a soft spot for soft shading. o w o;;

Old man my arse. :| He's at marriage / bachelor age. PSHHH. And am I reading this correctly ? * w * Kaotan's a stalkerrrrr for always being there whenever Ichikun checked his lockerrrr. <3

Anddd . .. I'd like it if you'd draw another page, but I'd hate it if you stress yourself too much just to draw it. :| Don't force yourself. "orz

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Er-- at the moment, I only see one speech bubbles where it could be revised. Two are completely optional and is fine as it is. Though . . . it's in my way of speech though, which is most likely different from your characters ? "orz

"Uh... you see, he told me once that he gave you his number already. But I wonder, why did you still use his locker to send him notes instead?!" could be revised to "Uh... you see, he once told me that he gave you his number. But I've been wondering, why did you use his locker to send him notes instead?"

This is optional, but "Whenever he checked his locker, I was there." could be rearranged into "I was there whenever he checked his locker."

For the fourth speech bubble, the comma after "though" could be replaced with a period.
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. . . okay. Let me go hide and sob for sounding arrogant for writing those last four paragraphs.

posted by Miyuxkanata on February 26th, 2011, 2:01 pm





 
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O: Sensei... D: when people are drunk..they say their most deep down feelings and those scenes are so sweet ^^
you look so different too xD

posted by AmoriiBlossom on February 26th, 2011, 2:51 pm





 
Feathers @ Miyuxkanata ( Reply )

LOL Those corrections are good, don't worry. And my first language is English, so there's a bit more convincing for ya. :3 IDK if your first language is English though, but it seems like it. XD

posted by Devil_Feathers on February 26th, 2011, 2:53 pm





 
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If you drew another page tomorrow I would die happy ; o ;

posted by Teenangst24 on February 26th, 2011, 3:13 pm



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Nearly anything can be cliché any more, usually any more it's just about how you present them, and trying to avoid the ones that are REALLY common. I think I've just read one too many since that's usually all I read, what just stood out to me was the high school setting, since it's such a common setting for manga. But if it's any consolation, the comic I'm working on isn't any better cliché wise, I have plenty quarks that I very well know are cliché. xD
Ah, that's understandable, English can be a pain to learn if you're not born knowing it. Have you ever tried writing everything in your original language, and having someone that knows the language translate it for you? It might be easier for you in the long run.

Yeah those can be really difficult to get the hang of, if you don't know how you could always look up tutorials on perspective/proportion, there's tons of helpful ones all over the internet now a days. Really if you are having trouble trying to figure out a way to draw that suits you, maybe you should veer away from it for a bit, try different "styles" or just do life drawing for a bit (Or draw from photos of real people.). In reality your "style" is whatever way your hand is comfortable drawing, you shouldn't be too discouraged if it changes, that only means your art is improving(It's like a fingerprint, no matter how much you change and grow over the years, it'll always be yours.). That's fine, there's no need to apologise, being busy is pretty understandable.

I think allot of people have that problem, the beginning is always the hardest, I think if you had them converse like how people in your language converse it'd be just fine (How people talk normally to one another is pretty universal.). Well, if you want to re-draw it, you could always finish it first and recreate it as a new comic. If you don't have any free time, you could always try updating on a once a week schedule, I usually do that so I have time to put in details around a busy schedule and not having to worry about getting it done in time.
Lol! At least you're honest, criticism can sound pretty offensive at times, I used to get pretty pissed about it when I was a kid. xD But please don't get depressed about it, your comic is allot better than most I've seen on here, and there are allot of people that like it. You don't have to start again, you could always just apply this criticism to future projects, I always consider the first comic to be a practice comic anyway since it's where you learn what and what not to do next time.
Take your time, it's not the end of the world to not update everyday, and taking the time to do the best you can between your busy schedule will do you worlds more good than trying to throw something together just to get it out there everyday. Thank you for taking my criticism so well, usually people get really upset about it, also this page looks very good (It's much more readable, and easy to look at with it's different tones.). C:

If you want I can send you a good lecture, and downloadable books on anatomy, or tutorials through an actual account to read in your spare time (Just as something to do when you have time, or feel like it.). Someone on gaia actually made a lecture thread that's related to what I'm talking about in my critique, again, something to browse when you feel like it/have spare time.

Uh! God, sorry I didn't mean for this post to be so long. xD

posted by Lulu (Guest) on February 26th, 2011, 3:21 pm





 
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=O I wish for you to crit. my comic whenever I do it. You don't have to, I'm just saying. XD Sorry to intrude, but I think you explain everything so perfectly. XD

posted by Devil_Feathers on February 26th, 2011, 5:21 pm





 
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I appreciate the fact you work & update so fast! I don't mind the sketchy pages at all :D

Also: roger that! I will point it out if I see anything :)

posted by _Sam_ on February 27th, 2011, 2:56 am





 
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I appreciate your solid effort to update, and I kinda can't wait to see what happens next, this story is just too good. LOVE.

posted by [Nix] on February 27th, 2011, 4:55 am





 
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I love how you update so often, and with such lovely pages <3
I feel like Sensei is a much more real character after hearing him talk about his problems.
But woah, he must really be drunk if he can't even recognize Ichi XDDD
Btw, I quite like your style right now, it suits the mood~

posted by megami23 on February 27th, 2011, 5:44 am





 
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OHMYGOD I jumped out of joy with this page :D
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OMG.. ;_;
AWWWWWWW. THAT IS THE... Sweetest thing ever... I cried abit at this page, I-I really did. Seriously ;u;

posted by AikiiYukii on February 27th, 2011, 8:18 am





 
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Haha. ^^; It is. It is. Though, I'm not confident with my English since I have troubles stuttering and . . . the internet brainwashing my spelling and grammar skills.

posted by Miyuxkanata on February 27th, 2011, 3:03 pm





 
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XD I'm the rare person who doesn't use a lot of Internet slang. It just does not suit me. *shrug* I'm the same with my Japanese, I'm jittering and confused whenever I speak it, but I can read it just fine. XD

posted by Devil_Feathers on February 28th, 2011, 9:30 am





 
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^^; I have the occasional internet slang, but I usually type literately. Pfft. It irks me whenever my friends type so . . . D:

posted by Miyuxkanata on February 28th, 2011, 8:22 pm





 
Feathers @ Miyuxkanata ( Reply )

LOL I know what you mean. My original language might be English, but I cannot understand, "lol jk ttyl thn". o.o'

posted by Devil_Feathers on March 1st, 2011, 9:36 am



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